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Post by ladybird on Mar 25, 2009 11:21:49 GMT -5
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douglas
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...with great power there must also come -- great responsibility!
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Post by douglas on Mar 25, 2009 12:53:43 GMT -5
this is wild brother, very modern style, the BW comic rocks, maybe the creature is a little confusing in the head (foreshortening) the color is great, but the drawing style kicks ass, very HEAVYMETAL.
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Post by chargedgraphite on Mar 25, 2009 16:05:45 GMT -5
Very interesting approach. Good stuff. Watch your natural body form there with Batman though...looks a little tubby.
Other than that, great stuff.
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seraph
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Working away...
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Post by seraph on Mar 25, 2009 16:12:46 GMT -5
Not sure about anyone else, but I'm having trouble piecing together the action by the cuts you've done for the gunshots, etc.
For example-
Pg 1-
Pnl 1- Easy enough to understand.
Pnl 2- Who's hand is reaching? While the panel itself is done well, in sequence, it doesn't tell enough when put next to the other two.
pnl 3- There's no way to tell how this person/thing entered the room. Did someone open the door? Did it open it? Did it break it down?
pnl 4- Gun shot panel. Fair enough.
In essence, I think there are some gaps in the storytelling here. It's confusing and not much is told to explain them.
for page two- if this is a continuance, there needs to be a LOT of explanation. If not, it's hard to tell who's performing the actions here, or even what the deal is with the hands (which I'm assuming are the right and left hands of two different people (respectfully)).
While I find the art style intriguing, I think you might need to brush up on storytelling technique.
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Post by mistresslegato on Mar 25, 2009 18:20:18 GMT -5
I really love the batman and zombie girl pieces!
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